drake

[dragon124]

this my fanfic 4 my character drake

my name is drake i was orphaned at birth i never got to know my real parents. i was adopted by mister hunter when i was five i found out he was the huntsmaster from the mythology books that i read in the study. he said that there are magical creatures in the nyc and around the world. when i turn 13 i was ready to slay my first dragon the huntsmaster gave me my first dragon the legendary dragon-x i knew what this beast could do to inexperinced hunters. but i was head of my league the huntsclan drop me off in the park there i saw it the dragon-x. i could see why they call ot dragon-x it had a x shape mark on it's paw it was a sleep this was my chance to strike as i snuck up behind it. it had already knew i was there and it sruck me in the leg i ingore the pain and struck back at the beast in it's troat then it started to glow i felt my head get heavy my body went num before i blacked out the last thing i heard was 'somebody call the ambualance quick a boy just passed out'.

i'll continue when i get some reviews

[American_Huntsgirl_Rose]

i do i think maybe i sould do this about Heather Hum???

But still good

[Stranger]

i like it so far!, but u did already PM me most of your story, But it is still good

[YFWE]

Great job so far!

[dragon124]

thanx and here's the second part

i woke arond ten or something i remembered the fight last night between me and the dragon i look a my leg no blood no scratch nothing. but then i swear i heard a dragonsheart beat in side me. my sense of smell heighted my strength tenfolded. the huntsmaster came by and told me that he was glad to see me but with the powers that recently optained i could see that was lying. on the way home he said the hunts clan conucil are going to me a hunts master half of me was glad the other half was not for some reason so later that night i went in the study and check the about the dragon-x it said that it's a lot powerful than other but it was banished from the dragon conucil. but it had the strange ability to give it soul and power to it's victor just then the huntsmaster busted and yelled that the dragon ain't at the park where i killed it the minute he left i relzeid that i was what that dragon did to me it gave me it's powers and soul it was in side of me
i'll do same thing i did for the first part

[YFWE]

Good again! The only thing is that it might be better to put in some punctuation marks at the end oif a sentence, so it is a little easier to read. But other than that, nice job!

[dragon124]

sorry try to do that next part

[YFWE]

That's cool. Whatever you want to do, it's your story!

[dragon124]

thnax i just need i more review from some1 esle and then i'll continue

[Stranger]

its good! pls continue

[dragon124]

ok heres the third part

i could not believie it that dragon gave it's powers to me. i knew if the hunts clan found out i would die. i had to find some1 to help me with these powers. so later that night i stole a couple hundred dollars and some food and left. the next day i knew the hunts clan will looking for me. i saw a clothes shop i have always like the disturbing tha peace crew so i bought the sweat shirt that has property of dtp crew baggy blue shorts and i found a jewlery store and bought a dtp pendant in silver, gold, platiuman, and diamond. that's when i saw jake long i knew he is the one i'm able to trust so i gather the courage to speak with him

i'll write the rest when i get some reviews

[Stranger]

keep going, pls

[dragon124]

ok heres the rest

as i worked up the courage i turned around once to see if some of the hunts clan is follow ing then i hear jakes voice 'hey are you lost ' i stood up and turned and said no i told him everthing that had happen of when i was abpoted till now. he just said ' man u had it rough didn't you but how did you know i was a dragon' he said when we reach his gandpa shop i told him that the huntsclan had told me when we got in his grandfather heard it an change to dragon ready to attck me. but some how i had all ready knew what he was about to do and i jump over him and grip him by the tail and started swing him around and around(like mario does to bowseron the mario games)and i let him fly in to the vcrs the minute he got up jake explained that i was a dragon too but i was born in a different way

i'll write the rest later now i got to get my chores done

[dragon124]

hey i'm back here's the rest

after hours of explain lou shi was surpised to see that i was a hunts clan member but ever since i got dragon-x's powers i told him i need some1 to help me controled them but he couldn't help me cuz he was training jake after jake was done training for the day i look at and ask if i could stay at his place for 1 night he said 'sure you can ' after that night i bid my farewels and left 4 me to survive with these powers i have to find some1 to help me with this and i must find out where my parents my real parents went to i got a lead that left for iowa so i'm gonna start there but jake did say theres a hunts caln there too so i have to be careful so went and bought me .20 pump action shotgun i couldn't use fire but did know how to fight. years went by and i made many frends over the years i kept in touch with jake to see how things are going there back nyc tho he did tell me mister hunter was to see if i was there haley nearly told him but he stop her and told him i went to austrila to meet fred nerk i owe jake big time now but i in new jersy asking ? if they know which way out of jersy

that's the last part for now

[Stranger]

lol, i like it. Both are charicters use guns now eh....., but yours is bigger. So in part 4 i guess i will need to give ryu an even larger gun ;D